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Improving Body Paragraphs

Goals for Second Essay of the Year
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  • Include five improved vocabulary words in each body paragraph
    • Look for simple words that can be replaced
      • thing, a lot, etc.
    • use a thesaurus
    • review S.A.T. vocab lists and vocab lists from A Separate Peace
  • Combine short sentences to avoid choppiness
    • Choppy: "Phineas is an important character in the novel. He is a good athlete. He is very humble. He does not care about recognition for his achievements."
    • Improved: "Phineas, an extremely important character in the novel, is an outstanding athlete who does not care about gaining fame for his achievements."